I've read it! I think it's very clear and puts across your views effectively. There are only a couple of comments I'd make, and you may well want to ignore them :)
The footnote about child consent and a 'sex licence test' struck me as a) very sensible but b) far-fetched enough that it might lead people to discount other aspects of your actual argument, if that makes sense.
There were a couple of instances of language which jarred on me as out of register - I think 'dodgy pictures' and 'perve on' were the main instances. They sounded to me rather slangier than the rest of the document, and again might undermine the points you're making.
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branchandroot
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Date: 2005-12-01 11:53 pm (UTC)The footnote about child consent and a 'sex licence test' struck me as a) very sensible but b) far-fetched enough that it might lead people to discount other aspects of your actual argument, if that makes sense.
There were a couple of instances of language which jarred on me as out of register - I think 'dodgy pictures' and 'perve on' were the main instances. They sounded to me rather slangier than the rest of the document, and again might undermine the points you're making.
Feel free to ignore, these are cosmetic issues.